12-16-2011, 07:14 PM
what to say, what to say.
i think some of the lines are great. specially the sniper one.
on first glance i thought...why all the roman numerals, but they sort of work well in
stopping it being a run of the mill list. it gives the insanity some sort of order.
i have no nits, just found it unusual and disturbingly funny. though i'm sure i shouldn't
it's originality alone shows if you have the confidence of getting some constructive feedback
that you should be posting in the serious or mild crit forums.
i just read it a few more times and improves as a decent read should.
thanks for posting it.
billy
i think some of the lines are great. specially the sniper one.
on first glance i thought...why all the roman numerals, but they sort of work well in
stopping it being a run of the mill list. it gives the insanity some sort of order.
i have no nits, just found it unusual and disturbingly funny. though i'm sure i shouldn't
it's originality alone shows if you have the confidence of getting some constructive feedback
that you should be posting in the serious or mild crit forums.
i just read it a few more times and improves as a decent read should.
thanks for posting it.
billy