modern (c word, content)

[Philatone]

hello billy. i see you've been inspired; can't say i've written a poem many poems without grammar either...

art in a can..nice opening, I think it draws the reader in well.
condensed cream of
tomato trope...like these two lines
posterised side by six..and this line and the next lost me a bit. I feel as though I'm losing touch with the image; of course, it may just be me
sides of marilyn
beauty spotted modern snots ..the word "snots" detracted from the poem from me. it didn't seem to fit as well as words like "condensed", "pastel", and "ultraviolet"; it loses that 'sophistication' of sorts I think
in pastel shards
and sometimes
ultraviolet shades of red
cultured cunts
who see the tin for what it is...enjoyed the close

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i thought i'd try my hand at one without grammar

one idea that flew to my mind on the form was making all the lines the same length to resemble a can of sorts. I admit I did get a bit lost in the middle; I'll have a few more reads later to see if anything changes