12-09-2011, 03:25 AM
Hi Hes, may I offer a simple reaction critique? (the technical stuff I will leave to others)
This shocked me. Not because I'm prudish but because of the way you have blasted aside all the love poems of the Shakespearen sonnet ilk. You're telling it like it is. I'm not sure I actually believe in love, and I certainly have never felt an affinity with those who wax lyrical about it.
The last verse served to complete the annihilation of 'pure' love as depicted in the sonnets and showed the brutality of where 'love' can lead.
I didn't 'enjoy' reading this...but, I'm glad that I did.
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This shocked me. Not because I'm prudish but because of the way you have blasted aside all the love poems of the Shakespearen sonnet ilk. You're telling it like it is. I'm not sure I actually believe in love, and I certainly have never felt an affinity with those who wax lyrical about it.
The last verse served to complete the annihilation of 'pure' love as depicted in the sonnets and showed the brutality of where 'love' can lead.
I didn't 'enjoy' reading this...but, I'm glad that I did.
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