The Adventurer's Manifesto

[addy]

Beauty so harsh and ucompromising,
glistening like cellophane Clever usage here; at first blush "cellophane" seems odd, but it is a nice, unique way of calling the scene pristine
caught by the midday light,
no God to blunder blindly through.
This is the vision of which I have dreamed This line seems a little awkward (though it read very well in the poem's final line)... maybe needs rephrasing
in camps below the moon.
Freed from man's stupidity
and his cleverness, his ambitions,
daily life, wating for a taxicab,
the last chair at the coffee house. The arrangement of your phrasing is very poignant-- man's ambitions inadvertently reduced to small, daily ones. Pretty effective

To see a flower grow then die,
rivers wash away their banks,
sunlight soak an arctic field,
the meaningless circles of life,
the pepetual motion machine,
this is the vision of which I have dreamed. I love the imagery of this stanza. Beautiful stuff.