The Hobbyist

[addy]

A soft, sweetly melancholic piece. I think you did a good job with this. I got the gist of it, though some lines were harder to discern than others (I had trouble with the second stanza in particular). Nevertheless the overall mood and effect the imagery gave was entrancing, and worked well for me. Many lines were, for me, spectacular ("pink parka splattered with sad confetti" is a favorite of mine, among others), and I really liked the final stanza. I think the first stanza could be edited as well, though I really like the cleverness of the first line and find it a strong opener (maybe remove the "a refuge from the back and forth" line altogether? I might have more concrete suggestions later)

Thanks very much for the read