10-15-2011, 06:35 AM
As I was reading this, I found myself remembering building cubby houses as kids in the bush behind our house -- and then the developers came and bulldozed the lot, so now the house I grew up in is no longer at the edge of town but right in the middle of the suburbs. Somehow it becomes a sanitising of our memories, as if they're redefining us in the generic -- just as your penultimate strophe describes so perfectly.
I think your tone and choice of language are ideal, very matter-of-fact and deceptively detached as if to protect the speaker from melancholy. (You could get rid of the apostrophe in Rottweilers though
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I think your tone and choice of language are ideal, very matter-of-fact and deceptively detached as if to protect the speaker from melancholy. (You could get rid of the apostrophe in Rottweilers though
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It could be worse