10-12-2011, 01:39 AM
Hi Jack,
This reminds me of the cycle of depression and mania that life sometimes seems to favor. My own interpretation is flawed I'm sure. I love the title.
This reminds me of the cycle of depression and mania that life sometimes seems to favor. My own interpretation is flawed I'm sure. I love the title.
(10-11-2011, 04:06 PM)Heslopian Wrote: Life is beginning again.I thinks you've done a fine job here and as always I'm glad to be reading your work.
Stasis' womb has opened, briefly,
pushing me through its entrance several inches, --would this be better without 'several inches'?
to greet blinding lamps which shine on honesty.
My heart is a cave, empty yet secret. --JMO, but 'heart' makes me pause. I wanna say it sounds cliche, but I don't think that's the right word.
But day is creeping through the mouth,
towards this furthermost darkness.
Slowly like a shy infant. I begin to hope. --my favorite line. Nice beautiful image when laid over 'furthermost darkness'

