Pearl:

[Todd]

Hi Billy,

I haven't read any other comments yet, and I had to go over the ghazal again (I may be a little loose on how effective you were with form).

I saw the prancing horses die at waters edge.--I love the first line and the refrain. Moving to the content though, this first line makes me think of calvary slaughtered in war. Not knowing the histroy I could be off but the battleship reference later seemed a little modern for the image I started with (again could just be me)
With manes that tossed , they made me cry at water's edge.

And left my crystal tears, a sob to soak the sand.--crystal tears borders a little too close to cliche for me.
To flood the ocean by and by, at water's edge.--Billy while I love the content here, this is very close to enjambment. I think it's allowed but if you could rework the line to remove it it might be closer to the form

The wind; I loved the salty spray it lifted high.
I closed my eyes, became the sky at water's edge.--The most gorgeous line in the poem. These are the moments in a poem that are just magic

When sulky clouds, through bellows, blow among the waves.--sulky clouds and through bellows blow is great
The tremor from the sea, a sigh at water's edge.--I love how the tremor is shown as a sigh (really good)

Arizona! Rest at peace below the thoughts of men.--below is a good addition here
Of battleships beneath, that fly the water's edge.--I like the contrast between beneath and fly. It makes you think of flags and past glory

I think you did an excellent job on the form. You made the refrain different in each instance. I hope some of the comments will be helpful.

Best,

Todd