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#4
10-02-2011, 07:48 AM
No, you terza-rime (!) perfectly for the most part, but L1 & L3 of S4 should really rhyme with "smile" in S3 -- instead you introduce the heap/weep rhyme out of nowhere.
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Messages In This Thread
For K - by abu nuwas - 10-02-2011, 06:38 AM
RE: For K - by Leanne - 10-02-2011, 07:13 AM
RE: For K - by abu nuwas - 10-02-2011, 07:36 AM
RE: For K - by Leanne - 10-02-2011, 07:48 AM
RE: For K - by abu nuwas - 10-02-2011, 08:04 AM
RE: For K - by Leanne - 10-02-2011, 08:13 AM
RE: For K - by billy - 10-02-2011, 08:58 AM
RE: For K - by abu nuwas - 10-02-2011, 09:17 AM
RE: For K - by billy - 10-02-2011, 09:19 AM
RE: For K - by abu nuwas - 10-03-2011, 03:19 AM
RE: For K - by billy - 10-03-2011, 03:57 PM
RE: For K - by abu nuwas - 10-03-2011, 06:42 PM
RE: For K - by only rob - 10-04-2011, 12:40 AM



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