09-28-2011, 02:18 PM
Strong poem with a confronting theme. I quite like the format and line breaks.
My favourite passage is:
"all the neon dust jackets
like bar signs slicing through the dark"
I don't have any nits to pick either.
My favourite passage is:
"all the neon dust jackets
like bar signs slicing through the dark"
I don't have any nits to pick either.

