09-27-2011, 07:13 PM
A wonderfully lyrical, imagistic piece. I think it could be improved tenfold by removing all punctuation and capitals, both of which are used a bit arbitrarily it seems.
The last verse is especially good, combining as it does the realism which has preceded it (the fishing boats and beacons of S4, for instance) with fantasy, the stone skipping across moonlight, the mermaids. It implies that beyond the edge of the world we see lies magic and wonder. Lovely. Thanks for the read, rien
The last verse is especially good, combining as it does the realism which has preceded it (the fishing boats and beacons of S4, for instance) with fantasy, the stone skipping across moonlight, the mermaids. It implies that beyond the edge of the world we see lies magic and wonder. Lovely. Thanks for the read, rien
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe