Selene and the boy
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(09-27-2011, 01:26 AM)Ca ne fait rien Wrote:  We share the awe
of a September evening
walk along the shore-line
with the long- haired woman
and her skittish boy.

Our dogs circle
snip and snap
wary of each other’s motives

twilight falls:
in the harbour up coast
lamps are lit

out at sea fishing boats
shimmer, beacons
on the edge of the world.


Harvest moon
breaks the horizon
sails above the waves
a helium balloon
floating up to clear sky.

The boy skims a pebble
along the golden path
of moonlight on the water
it skips seven times
before the mermaids
commence their song.
the harvest moon is so right for sept evening, and the verse it's in is my favourite. i'm not sure 'walk' is needed on the 3rd line as it's implied by 'along the shore line; snip and snap works on more than one level for me. edge of the world ties in with horizon well.
and selene in the title adds much to the tale. thanks the read.
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Messages In This Thread
Selene and the boy - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-27-2011, 01:26 AM
RE: Selene and the boy - by Wildcard - 09-27-2011, 03:28 AM
RE: Selene and the boy - by John Holland - 09-27-2011, 05:07 AM
RE: Selene and the boy - by abu nuwas - 09-27-2011, 05:10 AM
RE: Selene and the boy - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-27-2011, 05:26 AM
RE: Selene and the boy - by billy - 09-27-2011, 11:23 AM
RE: Selene and the boy - by heslopian - 09-27-2011, 07:13 PM
RE: Selene and the boy - by addy - 09-28-2011, 10:25 AM
RE: Selene and the boy - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-28-2011, 09:58 PM
RE: Selene and the boy - by only rob - 09-28-2011, 11:56 PM
RE: Selene and the boy - by marc - 09-29-2011, 06:41 AM



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