Brother Death

Brother Death

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09-27-2011, 10:59 AM

loved it, wondering if iambic pentameter or octameter would improve it.

loved the last couplet the most, it's meter was spot on iambic.
the poem didn't feel said, it felt more of a celebration of his life. (jmo)
thanks for the read

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Brother Death - by John Holland - 09-27-2011, 05:46 AM

RE: Brother Death - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-27-2011, 05:59 AM

RE: Brother Death - by grannyjill - 09-27-2011, 06:17 AM

RE: Brother Death - by billy - 09-27-2011, 10:59 AM

RE: Brother Death - by Patrick Traveler - 09-27-2011, 04:26 PM

RE: Brother Death - by John Holland - 09-27-2011, 05:45 PM

RE: Brother Death - by billy - 09-27-2011, 06:33 PM

RE: Brother Death - by John Holland - 09-28-2011, 05:41 AM

RE: Brother Death - by heslopian - 09-27-2011, 07:01 PM

RE: Brother Death - by billy - 09-28-2011, 06:01 AM

RE: Brother Death - by John Holland - 09-28-2011, 07:22 AM

RE: Brother Death - by billy - 09-28-2011, 08:50 AM

RE: Brother Death - by Leanne - 09-28-2011, 08:21 AM

RE: Brother Death - by John Holland - 09-28-2011, 01:05 PM

RE: Brother Death - by Leanne - 09-28-2011, 09:21 AM

RE: Brother Death - by billy - 09-28-2011, 09:51 AM

RE: Brother Death - by Leanne - 09-28-2011, 09:54 AM

RE: Brother Death - by marc - 09-29-2011, 06:45 AM

RE: Brother Death - by abu nuwas - 10-03-2011, 07:18 AM

RE: Brother Death - by Wildcard - 10-04-2011, 12:05 AM

RE: Brother Death - by John Holland - 10-04-2011, 07:53 AM

RE: Brother Death - by Todd - 10-04-2011, 09:52 AM

RE: Brother Death - by John Holland - 10-04-2011, 12:15 PM

RE: Brother Death - by billy - 10-04-2011, 03:35 PM

RE: Brother Death - by Wildcard - 10-04-2011, 10:27 PM

RE: Brother Death - by John Holland - 10-05-2011, 05:04 PM

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