Behind the Shroud

[ICSoria]

You mix trochaic and iambic pentameter in this and it took me a couple of run-throughs to get the meter fixed in my head, but once it was there it worked just fine. The variations are really interesting, especially with the self-aware "though she knows the tempo sounded wrong". The couplet is the only part that's perfectly iambic, which seems quite appropriate to me since that's the Muse's departure.

I think "reciting verses that their children wrote" would be better, but that's my only pick really. It's a great read, Sid.

I always look forward to your input, Leanne, as I so greatly respect your metric ear. I agree about that word and will change it. Thank you,

Sid