Rorschach

[billy]

You do not know,
nor love the chalky crevices and dark knotholes of my cenotaphic soul,
coral polyp dissolved
beneath the drying bath of this polygamist sun-god;

a lone calcareous skeleton
propped in a corner and forgotten, great imagery i the 1st two lines
spidersilked against crickety planks too far indoors to suckle dew. i love this line, at first i thought you meant rickety, but i like crickety much better.

And what of the cockroach-egg infested envelope glue, would 'glue' work better on the next line?
imbedded on the underbelly (embedded)
of my tongue,

waiting to hatch while is 'while' needed
sleeping soft on the needles of refugees? (i can't get a handle on this line

It's in the eye of the poppy seed. what is?
It's in the sightless bell jar full of melting stones.
It tarries,
and holds me, overdue. is 'and' needed?

lots of good stuff going on Aish. (For me,) it could do with some work on the enjambment; most of the long lines. i think it would look better visually and enhance the harshness of the poem.

a couple of the lines meaning eluded me, but that could just be me not being aware enough. there is a great poem in there with the help of a small edit. (jmo)

thanks for the read