09-10-2011, 01:07 AM
Thanks guys. Todd..I see what you are saying about making it deeper, and I do like the idea of not using rhyme. I will try that. So the lake and fake...making you wonder what I was meaning. Do you think that is something that I should specify? I appreciate your feedback.
Leanne...I like the shorting of line four. That does sound much better. I will try to find a better way to word line
16. Billy and Addy...thanks for your feedback as well. All of the things you guys said are very helpful. I'm gonna work on revising it soon..and see how it goes. Look forward to sharing more and reading more.
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Leanne...I like the shorting of line four. That does sound much better. I will try to find a better way to word line
16. Billy and Addy...thanks for your feedback as well. All of the things you guys said are very helpful. I'm gonna work on revising it soon..and see how it goes. Look forward to sharing more and reading more.
=)