Thoughts of You

[addy]

You have some nice imagery here, as the others pointed out --- the skipping stone, the water, the cranes (the cranes, I feel, is an especially nice touch, since in several cultures cranes are seen as symbols of longevity and fealty, and are also regarded as travelers/ messengers / heralds)

I think this poem could still be shortened. Not for the sake of shortening it, mind you... but imo from here you can cherry-pick which images/lines will help you tell the most cohesive story with your subject. Currently the problem I see with it is that you try to mention too many things--- lake, wind, sky, grass, shore, rock, sand, sun --- that it ends up reading more like a running tally of stuff you see in nature, thus making it a bit generic. I say stick with a combination of elements that best allow you to tell the story you want to tell: just as an example, ---a rock, ripple, wind, birdsong --- I associate the combination of those elements with loneliness, a sense of quiet pining, seeing signs and chasing shadows... you get the idea LOL

So pick any combination of elements you want, something that you think best distills the mood and sentiment you wish to express... it will make the piece that much tighter and give it more impact. Just a suggestion purplepix