09-09-2011, 05:53 AM
not a lot to say constructively rob
maybe say i've heard of velvet curtain in other places and that it may feel a little cliche. but that would i think be unfair.
when you madness yourself thinking
in metaphors and odd yourself
to your fellows
or bellow sonnets without
provocation
in a biker bar
the above like the rest of the poem is a roller coaster ride in words. i usually hate poets writing about poets but not here, you've done the deed well, some of the images are extremely well written. Abu mentioned the if poem and i agree, except this is the when poem for coming of age poets. welcome again to the forum
maybe say i've heard of velvet curtain in other places and that it may feel a little cliche. but that would i think be unfair.
when you madness yourself thinking
in metaphors and odd yourself
to your fellows
or bellow sonnets without
provocation
in a biker bar
the above like the rest of the poem is a roller coaster ride in words. i usually hate poets writing about poets but not here, you've done the deed well, some of the images are extremely well written. Abu mentioned the if poem and i agree, except this is the when poem for coming of age poets. welcome again to the forum