08-31-2011, 05:50 AM
i think it's about time you progress to at least the mild forum Abu
a great bit of nonsense the only thing for is ;
on line 4 in the 4th verse, is 'to' needed. though thinking about it, it doesn't really
matter i suppose.
i wasn't too keen on the last line, it feels too contrived.
the end rhymes were quite inventive and work really well
thanks for lending me a smile.
and the read
a great bit of nonsense the only thing for is ;
on line 4 in the 4th verse, is 'to' needed. though thinking about it, it doesn't really
matter i suppose.
i wasn't too keen on the last line, it feels too contrived.
the end rhymes were quite inventive and work really well
thanks for lending me a smile.
and the read