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09-03-2011, 04:48 PM
(This post was last modified: 09-04-2011, 09:23 AM by billy.)
I'm not a foreign kind of swine,
and you can stick your terza rima
where Italian sun don't shine.
I always get fat edema
when i hear Wop poems read.
they're all pimp, not really prima
I'm just glad Petrach is dead.
If they stuck by their omertà ,
then in English we could tread.
While some dago called roberta,
had big tits and liked to rhyme,
it would be for fucking certa
banging her would be a crime.
Cosa Nostra, ten-a-penny
pasta poets out of time.
Quasimodo peeling many
with poetics of the word.
Tell me who the fuck's read any?
All his fans have ever heard
is just another eyetie turd.
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09-04-2011, 07:41 AM
(This post was last modified: 09-04-2011, 07:42 AM by Leanne.)
You could get rid of "the" at the start of S5 L2, I forgot to mention it before
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sort of like allowing me to dig my own grave
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You don't need any help there, surely?
No really, I did forget, honest :p I think that's the last metric stumble though.
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are your pants on fire by any chance?
the line works a lot better now, thanks.
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Not quite, but my arse is extremely hot :p
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stop using firey jack as tube lube then
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please stay on topic (it's the poem you should be posting about)/admin
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Billy, did you just moderate yourself?
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09-07-2011, 05:42 AM
(This post was last modified: 09-07-2011, 05:43 AM by billy.)
yes, i sometimes do it just to get things back on track if i'm also one of the guilty parties
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A fine example of single standards.
