Surreal

[billy]

Wide ache, awakened. would wide ache read better hyphenated?

Stormgreen glass
and smooth jazz,
notes elongated. beautiful image

Frozen downbeat.

Bones of the sea arise,
orbiting naked
in iambic moonlight; would Spondaic moonlight work better

no longer fluently
paralyzed.

the reason i asked about spondaic is because moonlight is a spondee, (i think ) two stressed syls (a kind of play on words)

i like the lazy feel of it, the wide ache awakened of the first line fits the theme perfectly, so does the 2nd verse.

thanks for the read.