07-29-2011, 12:12 PM
great line here.
The moon a fat comedian
pausing for breath against his stool.
But what I crave is emptiness.
I have no need of pain (who does?)
but simply silence, a blond-haired boy
****there is a hard transition to
make from silence/to/ a blond, when read out loud, at least in my accent.
to share it with, preferably eighteen and dim.
Also like dim as an end word goes well with moon.
Other than that good read.
David
The moon a fat comedian
pausing for breath against his stool.
But what I crave is emptiness.
I have no need of pain (who does?)
but simply silence, a blond-haired boy
****there is a hard transition to
make from silence/to/ a blond, when read out loud, at least in my accent.
to share it with, preferably eighteen and dim.
Also like dim as an end word goes well with moon.
Other than that good read.
David