Poetry

[addy]

Splendid work Jack. i had a couple teeny nits but this is certainly an excellent read

Let's be honest, hearts are dull. good opening
The soul is a whiteboard filled with sums
few of us can hope to solve. would it be stronger to straight-out say that no one can solve it?
To say I write from my gut
doesn't mean a great deal.

What matters is the metaphors,
the beauty of the images:
why need a soul when hell is hot, great line
burning with the endless skin
of those who once through cities walked,
looking in a window here,
checking their laces there. i'm lukewarm about this last line... very specific, yet it doesn't seem to say a great deal

All this is much more thrilling than
the simple arrogance of graves, I've never heard of "arrogant graves"... I love it
the emptiness, the silent rot
no poem can justify. I really like this, the turnaround that, in fact, the human condition is so ineffable and powerful that though you praise poetry and brimstone, there is a glibness to it in comparison