Eggshell Dance

[addy]

She danced on eggshells, on the edge;
accrued indifference, feigned exception I didn't much like "accrued", only because the line before it imo doesn't give enough context for the word to then be descriptive... maybe if you switched the order: "feigned exception, accrued indifference..." the logic would flow better
to the lies and sophistry--
conspiratorial "conspiratorial" sounds a little clunky partners of deception

masked in clever conversations. Like that this doubles as metaphorical masks, while alluding to a masquerade-like party
She weighs the options, even while
he watches and discreetly though "discreetly" is a description in keeping with the tone of the piece, maybe it's not needed to describe the act of thinking which is already hidden wonders
when she lost the enigmatic smile. nice close.

ICSoria
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Thanks for sharing