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Hi Sid,

You've had a lot of comments on this already and the line breaks have already been addressed. I just wanted to add that I really like your tone and word choices throughout. This is an unpredictable piece. I especially like the internal rhyme of day with Creme Brule. I did make me wonder specifically what that top his day experience would be like: carmelized sugar and a blow torch . The entire sundress part was well done also. I like that you didn't choose anything easy or predictable here and that the end result still felt so unforced.
Enjoyed the read.
Best,
Todd

Todd,
Thanks for your perspective and the comments,

Sid