07-22-2011, 03:53 AM
The end of the poem is wonderful. The sunlight filtering through the dress as though it were a prism; divine. I also like the internal rhyme of "day" and "Brule".
What does "lissome" mean? I don't believe I've come across that word before.
A wee suggestion as well: Would the rhyme of "hue" and "through" be more pronounced if "a sheer" was placed at the start of the penultimate line?
Thanks for the read
What does "lissome" mean? I don't believe I've come across that word before.
A wee suggestion as well: Would the rhyme of "hue" and "through" be more pronounced if "a sheer" was placed at the start of the penultimate line?
Thanks for the read
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe