07-12-2011, 06:14 AM
The syntax is skewered at times, as is the nature of the beast, but on the whole this is a thoroughly enjoyable sonnet. Doesn't the question mark at the end of the first line belong one down after "man"?
Does "cups" in the third line of the second verse relate to bras?
I love "Peter Pest", and I love the grotty, grimy nature of this ode to skin bars, pubs and the like. If nothing else it's original. Shakespeare for the lads
Though I should point out, in case you're unaware, that "Heaven" is the name of a massive gay bar in London, which made me giggle given this poem's content
Does "cups" in the third line of the second verse relate to bras?
I love "Peter Pest", and I love the grotty, grimy nature of this ode to skin bars, pubs and the like. If nothing else it's original. Shakespeare for the lads
Though I should point out, in case you're unaware, that "Heaven" is the name of a massive gay bar in London, which made me giggle given this poem's content
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe