Within Her Soul by William Marsland

[billy]

The thing is, form-wise I find it to be a very solid piece. Good rhyme and rhythm.

If it has faults, it's only in the content, in that it's a tad cliche

I would also suggest that you rework the first verse... you spend two lines of it talking about starlight (if i understand correctly?) and kind of drifting away from the subject of the poem before jumping right back into talking about "her" in the second stanza. Or perhaps you were trying to compare "her" to the starlight at night, in which case I must have missed it

I don't care what you say, I still like it

thanks addy. poetry thankfully, doesn't have to be good to be liked :p
i'll let it be for another day or two and then do a crit of it myself.

thanks for taking the time to read and comment. and yep, it's cliche,
more than a tad even