The Undiscovered Country

[critical mass]

Hespolian

Very nice piece.
Very haunting deliberate voice in this and you carried it all the way through which is even more impressive.

Stringing fairy lights across
my ribs and silent jaw. I hope I never leave this shore.

This is one of the most original lines I believe I have read.
Very nice.

scraped knees, old wounds,
kisses, sex, illness and joy,

I might pare these down a bit too vague for the voice in this piece for me.

Very well done

David