To Watch Someone Ache Inside A Lightbulb

[jadielue]

"Easy streets are for squares!" the Greasers hurled at their flesh-paint graffiti walls.
Their tendons strained against bursting columns, some of guns, some of glass.
What did they mean by that? "Easy streets", where is there an easy anything?
Even in kindergarten crayons break. Nothing's easy, everything turns out blurry,
faded, or not at all the way you planned. As if someone else stitched the button
on your shirt, someone inexperienced, dumb, someone like you seem to be." ~ Henry Silva, The Gore of Coring Apples

"I don't succeed, I fail, constantly. My arms break when I go to hug you,
my bones splinter when I begin to run. Why can't I do the things you do?
Why can't I bloom out of my braces and run to you? Why do I need scaffolding
to breathe? Why does my head throb humorously against the cage you've set?
Why do you incapacitate me so?" Carolyne Seem, Crushed

"One, two, three. One, two, three. In, out. In, out. In. Out.
There's something so invertly sexual about rhythmic things, things of and like this.
Something, familiar. Even to the virgin eye it stems a wroth want in your carefully kept veins.
Prudes, shining us on from your villa, like cheap dollar store daisies - we also stem from pots." Daniel Chag, Room Familiar

[billy]

i love the content. i'm just struggling to not see it as prose.
the room familiar for me is excellent. i just think the the block writing detracts from a great read.

crushed,again for me is an excellent write. the extended cripple metaphor is perfect for the piece, yet for me that great write feels diminished and lost in the prose.

the gore; i love the line; Even in kindergarten crayons break. the content is so rich yet i feel i pass over it faster than i should because of the format.
i did force myself to slow down and in doing so found so much good original writing. i would have preferred to have had a break now again. jmo.

thanks for the read.