06-24-2011, 10:31 AM
LOL! 
I might be off base, but I'd like it better if the lines "I didn’t want to drench --the unsuspecting woman with child---" were somehow rewritten to make it clear that you did drench them. Only in the succeeding lines did I realize you had done the deed. Just my impression though
I might be off base, but I'd like it better if the lines "I didn’t want to drench --the unsuspecting woman with child---" were somehow rewritten to make it clear that you did drench them. Only in the succeeding lines did I realize you had done the deed. Just my impression though
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?