06-21-2011, 10:39 AM
I think this piece reads really well... the flow is great, and there's something so honest and natural about the tone which I love. Only you can talk about switches and leather chaps without it sounding contrived or like posturing 
i quite liked the first line myself? It made the dilemma of the piece clear from the get-go, if sexuality is indeed a fiction, and it was an interesting premise to start.
i quite liked the first line myself? It made the dilemma of the piece clear from the get-go, if sexuality is indeed a fiction, and it was an interesting premise to start.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?