06-08-2011, 11:13 AM
(06-08-2011, 06:54 AM)violet Wrote: Procrastinate everythingthe only nit is to remove a couple of small words.
Pretend your dreams are realistic is your needed?
and that you're not socially awkward is and needed?
That heartbreak isn't a word
Hell..that even love never existed
Watch the preacher sing hypocrisies
blessing with one hand, damning with the other
Pretend you are not a gullible instrument
used for entertainment
Pretend you like their jokes
Fill their mechanized minds
with phoney compliments
and false promises
Pretend you give two shits love this line
Listen to your bastard boss
thank you for your co-operation
A machine works best are this and the next line need?
when every part is in line
Just play real life and live pretend
Fuck it
Where's my jacket?
a good rant poem with a lot to like about it.
first off i enjoyed the modern idiom you used. it earths the poem in the now, and adds to the do it by rote mentality the poem's suggesting, until the last line when it feels the procrastinator and possibly the poet has had enough. (jmo)
thanks for the read

