Boredom

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Love this one (a macabre take on inspiration if I ever saw one ). Not much I can comment on, I'm afraid.

To say I’m surrounded by wasted lives
would imply those lives once had potential. Oh snap. It's so bad but I laughed
The retarded man orders a pot of tea
for his elderly female companion, telling the waitress
again and again that he’s paying with his money;
she rolls her eyes beneath dyed hair. Her expression says
“I belong to this generation, and disapprove of those
who don’t.” But she is just as tedious as the man child
in his rain coat, and again the word “wasted” seems wrong.
No chair could be made from these sticks. It's a nice line on its own, but imo not necessary in this part
I finish my steak dinner and leave. The clouds look heavy. There's a humdrum to the narration so far that really drives the point home. Nicely done

Perhaps serial killers are driven in part by ennui,
a boredom so fierce they must score their lives with screams. Nice line
Tired of hallways and doors, books, cinemas, alarm clocks
and grocery bills, the million ways we prolong our lives,
maybe they see the rope, like the transition from "prolong" to "rope" the knife, the pretty girl’s neck
on the couch beside them, then suddenly the world is red,
glorious, bright, filling the monochrome shapes. I think the ending hangs a little? But that's just imo. It still an excellent line.