Icarus

Icarus

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05-26-2011, 09:23 AM

for me the edit reads much better,
i like the the reversal of verses, the new 1st verse sets the poem off much better.

i like the Daedalus verse was a great addition, though i think it's a given who he built the wings for.

all in all a really good edit.
thanks for the read.

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Icarus - by mroning tide - 05-24-2011, 12:36 AM

RE: Icarus - by billy - 05-24-2011, 06:07 AM

RE: Icarus - by Todd - 05-24-2011, 07:15 AM

RE: Icarus - by mroning tide - 05-24-2011, 08:55 AM

RE: Icarus - by billy - 05-24-2011, 09:28 AM

RE: Icarus - by heslopian - 05-24-2011, 10:33 AM

RE: Icarus - by mroning tide - 05-24-2011, 05:12 PM

RE: Icarus - by jadielue - 05-24-2011, 05:17 PM

RE: Icarus - by mroning tide - 05-24-2011, 06:08 PM

RE: Icarus - by Todd - 05-24-2011, 08:36 PM

RE: Icarus - by jadielue - 05-25-2011, 10:56 AM

RE: Icarus - by billy - 05-26-2011, 09:23 AM

RE: Icarus - by mroning tide - 05-26-2011, 09:14 PM

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