05-14-2011, 03:48 PM
(05-14-2011, 09:59 AM)jadielue Wrote: "The stars were ragged in yourWhat can I say? Beautiful piece.
presence, dear." Lovely opening.
Your lips, like lovingly
scalpeled roses. "lovingly scalpeled roses" just sounds so bloody good
Your eyes, the succinctly
corroded color of ruin. another gorgeous phrase
Am I blind? Or am I
just so damn in love
that I could leave this
big green and blue uterus
without even knowing? I love how you sound so earnest here and make it so beautifully poetic
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?