04-24-2011, 09:30 AM
(04-21-2011, 02:58 PM)billy Wrote: Dying angels in autumn leaves, The phrasing makes this image a little vague?A simple, effective mood piece. Nicely done.
dance dark pirouettes.
The smell of earthy musk loiters,
like the ghost of breath.
Crippled in a stark naked crowd
my twisted oak is bared. Interesting image of being exposed
Summer, fickle summer has left.
I shall sulk for its warmth, Elegant use of "sulk" here
but first face the wicked winter.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
