(content warning) violence and futility

[Todd]

Hi Jack,

This would be a great spoken word piece.

this is a poem about violence--normally not the type of opening I like, but it works here
broken spines
and
severed heads
and
bloody torsos--I like this line break structure you've done here
shining by the light of the moon
like grotesque disco balls--I think you need to be singular here and maybe add hung to the opening of the line (hung like a grotesque disco ball)...very cool image
and that...--cool

how does one express futility
without defeating the object
of such a belief?

if you express you believe
that expression is good
that your words should be read--maybe move this line beneath "and isn't this a form of optimism?

and isn't that a form of optimism?--love this question

still i continue to read
Cormac McCarthy
Patricia Highsmith
and the like--the specific names in this make the lines pop

maybe we miserable fuckers
just like people to know
what miserabke fuckers we are--love the ending lines

Nice write Jack.

Best,

Todd