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The Child (Edit)

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02-03-2011, 11:32 AM

i have to agree with todd that the ending is spot on
the poem as a whole feels more sinister.
for me it's a lot better though i did enjoy the 1st one as well.

nice edit lawrence

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The Child (Edit) - by Lawrence - 02-02-2011, 08:19 PM

RE: The Child (Edit) - by Todd - 02-03-2011, 03:36 AM

RE: The Child (Edit) - by billy - 02-03-2011, 11:32 AM

RE: The Child (Edit) - by waitingforgodet - 02-03-2011, 11:25 PM

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