Canned Groceries

[heslopian]

dinner compressed in a tin cylinder,
grim and petite like a Chinese girl's feet,
sold near the notebooks and cheap ballpoint pens.
who buys their groceries at the post office?
I imagine whole cupboards bursting with this junk,
sustenance arranged like medication,
this colour for breakfast, that one for dinner,
the only housewife's skill needed
turning the lever on a can opener.
life dull and arranged, progress unheeded.

[billy]

dinner compressed in a tin cylinder,
small and efficient like a Chinese girl's feet, [b] for me the feet aren't efficient though i still love the simile[/b]
sold near the notebooks and cheap ballpoint pens.
who buys their groceries at the post office? good image and question
I imagine whole cupboards bursting with this junk,
sustenance arranged like medication,
this colour for breakfast, that one for dinner,
the only housewife's skill needed
turning the lever on a can opener.
life dull and arranged, progress unheeded.

the mundanity of beans on toast.

it reads as a nice little look at the eating habits of a small flat dweller lol.
it reminds me of a time in my youth when everything i ate came from a can a loaf and a bottle of milk. a nice read, thanks as always jack.

[heslopian]

Would "grim and petite" work better than "small and efficient"?
Thank you for the kind words and feedback Billy

EDIT: Changed "small and efficient" to "grim and petite". Thanks Billy

[billy]

i think it would.