02-03-2011, 03:36 AM
Love the changes Lawrence. You smoothed out some minor parts and your ending was just awesome.
I loved eyes like fist and Light crawls in like scorpions.
Great rewrite much more powerful than the petals plucked image.
Best,
Todd
I loved eyes like fist and Light crawls in like scorpions.
Great rewrite much more powerful than the petals plucked image.
Best,
Todd
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