Hey Billy,
Thanks a lot for such good feedback. I corrected rotten. Yeah sulfur/sulphur is a US/UK thing. I'll look at the enjambment on birth and consider the other comments you made. Thank you so much.
Best,
Todd
Did a quick edit. The answer to the rhetorical will take some thought if I go that way. The other fix felt easy (agreed that announcement used as I had it was clunky).
Thanks a lot for such good feedback. I corrected rotten. Yeah sulfur/sulphur is a US/UK thing. I'll look at the enjambment on birth and consider the other comments you made. Thank you so much.
Best,
Todd
Did a quick edit. The answer to the rhetorical will take some thought if I go that way. The other fix felt easy (agreed that announcement used as I had it was clunky).
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