12-20-2010, 09:39 AM
Thank you, Billy
My opinion of this piece wasn't too high, so you saying that it's one one of your favourites by me has made my day somewhat. Do you think the last lines would work better like this?:
"taut and pouting
like fresh fish on my television screen,
as I drink lemonade
then grow slowly erect."
Thanks again for your feedback and very kind words
My opinion of this piece wasn't too high, so you saying that it's one one of your favourites by me has made my day somewhat. Do you think the last lines would work better like this?:"taut and pouting
like fresh fish on my television screen,
as I drink lemonade
then grow slowly erect."
Thanks again for your feedback and very kind words
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe