Earliest Memory

[Todd]

Hi Jack,

I very much like the image you create with your first two lines. The overflow of bath water gives so much. What makes me like it so much is that it gives a sense of comfort and care. You packed a lot in there.

Light spilling through the window
like an overflow of bath water,

angry rays become the wall,--angry feels a bit at odds with me from the tone you've set. I do like the become, engulf, and hide...there is this sense of the world imposing itself on the infant's awareness in a flood
engulf the frame and hide the glass.

Below this rim of nirvana--absolutely love this line
my infant's consciousness empties.

Two angels in leather jackets
sit near the light above me.--this is a cool image

Beside me on my level
sits my still youthful mother.--still youthful mother is very good

Everyone is smiling--fantastic line break you totally mess with the meaning here and it's wonderful.
like nervous doctors.--love this

Pre-breakdowns and tragedies,
I'm caught in a divine stasis.

Solid poem Jack. Thanks.

Best,

Todd