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Earliest Memory
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12-13-2010, 06:24 PM
Beautiful, and the right balance of specific and vague. Personally I loved the third couplet, particularly the second line which was just sublime. If it had a weakness, maybe the first line of it gives a bit away for you poem's final line. But for me, not even enough to worry about
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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Earliest Memory - by heslopian - 12-10-2010, 12:49 PM
RE: Earliest Memory - by billy - 12-12-2010, 09:30 AM
RE: Earliest Memory - by heslopian - 12-13-2010, 01:37 AM
RE: Earliest Memory - by addy - 12-13-2010, 06:24 PM
RE: Earliest Memory - by heslopian - 12-14-2010, 02:12 AM
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