i really really like this.
my one nit is the fact you mentioned white and snow / snow white at all, even though it was done in a round about way.
for me it an excellent take on the fairy tale.
loved the 3rd land 4th stanza in which you got the evil character to a t.
the 4th stanza feels a little bare but that could just be me. (forget this line, i must have been on drugs ) i meant the last lines, which i'd previously mentioned as a nit
the last 4 lines in the 2nd to last stanza for me could do with a small tidy to make it flow better..
thanks for the read todd. (jmo)
my one nit is the fact you mentioned white and snow / snow white at all, even though it was done in a round about way.
for me it an excellent take on the fairy tale.
loved the 3rd land 4th stanza in which you got the evil character to a t.
the 4th stanza feels a little bare but that could just be me. (forget this line, i must have been on drugs ) i meant the last lines, which i'd previously mentioned as a nit
the last 4 lines in the 2nd to last stanza for me could do with a small tidy to make it flow better..
thanks for the read todd. (jmo)