12-05-2010, 04:29 PM
(12-04-2010, 01:37 PM)digna_sofia Wrote: The second of this week's poems.i have to be honest, i wasn't sure about this at first.
There needs to be a compromise
between the lies
and uttermost temptation.
For there is no elation. [is 'for needed?]
Just a sense of deprivation and the loss;
the loss of a slice of shady soul to a grain upon a cross. [this is a fantastic line and i love it]
Just a puff bated breath at every query
every curve of punctuation in their eyes.
Just prayer for that fiction to be
(for now)
alive.
Just that,
and relief.
And dread.
maybe i'm still not sure. if feels like the poetry is a chore, but then i felt i was being myopic, after more than a few reads, it feels like the life of a writer and their need for recognition. (maybe not recognition but acceptance) from those who pay the wages. jmo
