Maybe It'll Be Alright
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hehe,

i can't see anything i'd change.
loved the first five couplets. the last one was okay though for me it felt a little flat or forced.
some of the images are just right.

what an epic couplet poem you could make this way, just an on and on and on poem.

thanks for the laugh and the read jack
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Maybe It'll Be Alright - by heslopian - 10-15-2010, 02:40 AM
RE: Maybe It'll Be Alright - by billy - 10-15-2010, 07:39 AM
RE: Maybe It'll Be Alright - by heslopian - 10-15-2010, 07:48 AM
RE: Maybe It'll Be Alright - by billy - 10-15-2010, 03:29 PM
RE: Maybe It'll Be Alright - by heslopian - 10-15-2010, 09:33 PM



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