Money [Serious Critique]
#3
It was a quick jot down but maybe I need to move it further away from the cliché.

Is it all about the money?
The less I think about it
The more I need it.
Humanity's lust,
The root of most my evil.
The thirst inside me.

C'mon I need some critique and advice because I do intend to improve Tongue.
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Money [Serious Critique] - by mrmod - 06-10-2010, 02:42 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by billy - 06-10-2010, 05:26 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by mrmod - 06-10-2010, 05:55 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by billy - 06-10-2010, 06:10 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by mrmod - 06-10-2010, 06:25 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by billy - 06-10-2010, 06:43 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by mrmod - 06-10-2010, 07:28 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by srijantje - 06-10-2010, 09:46 AM
RE: Money [Serious Critique] - by billy - 06-10-2010, 09:52 AM



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