Money [Serious Critique]

[billy]

Is it all about the money?
The less I think about it
The more I need it.
Humanity's lust,
The root of most my evil.

I made this poem as a judgement of my greed. I wouldn't class myself as greedy per se but I maybe take money too seriously. Anyways, enjoy.

it would have benefited with at least one good image, metaphor, or other poetic device

the last line has been used more times than you've had hot dinners (its old/a cliche)

that said it has lots of potential. small poems only need small edits to become great small poems

i really appreciate this poem because it's shows all the slobs in the sewer what can be done. thanks dan